Hi All,

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Just thought I'd open a new thread to discuss the Tron 2.1 fanfic I was serialising.

It now past 45,000 word and 100 pages.

Anyway, since it's getting a little longer, I wanted to get some opinions on the story direction and characters.

Since any discussion like this is going to be full of spoilers, I didn't want it in the same thread as the one I'm using to announce new chapters and talk about current occurances.

I know there's not a huge readership at present, but I know there are about a half-dozen regular readers who contribute feedback, which I do read.

Most of that I use to fine-tune the way I write subsequent chapters, so many of the early criticisms were expected and actually helped me keep the story on track.

As at now, there are 9 chapters, each averaging around 5000 words. The most of the main characters have been defined, both inside and outside of the digital world.

The first question I was hoping the regular readers would help me with was about Jade.

I'll detail some quick notes about Jade here. Anything that isn't already obvious isn't intended to be a spoiler. I'll hold back on some things as there is a little more to know in 2.19 about her.

Character: Jade
Program Sex - Female
Age Appearance - Indeterminate. Could pass as anything around 30ish.
Age: Very old. Remembers the MCP. At least 20 human years. Thousand of subjective program years.
Function: System Application - Syslog.
Run-level 2. (Root). (Kernel or MCP would be 1, Sark would be 2 also, for comparison).

Other than that, what I will say presently about the intended character is that she's pretty wily. She's been around longer than even the Kernel and remembers first-hand the era of Tron and Flynn. (She's likely to be the only character other than Flynn or Alan who goes back this far, other than I-no. And Yes, She would know I-No quite well and vice-versa, but that's not a plot mechanism for this story.).

(She was around when Flynn entered the first time, but was a very new application around then - later adapted to serve the Kernel.).

She's pretty tough, literally vicious and very dangerous (far more so that is immediately obvious ). She's a survivor and knows how to manipulate programs to get what she wants. Ma3a is right to be cautious of her.

On the other hand, she does seem completely attached to Jet. The "Watch" beacon isn't just an API. It's more like a SUDO permission - ie, root level access to her routines. Her pledge is genuine too - Jet effectively now "owns" her. But her reasons for doing this aren't completely known and it's not something a program would do lightly - ever.

Other than that, she does seem to fight on the side of the users.

The reasons for adding Jade?

There are many, most of which are yet to develop, so I'll add them in later, but at a purely superficial level, she's a system routine, which means she can do stuff the others can't.

She also needed to explain some things to Jet and intercede at times. Kind of a Deus Ex Machina for 2.18.

Anyway, I was wondering what are the reader feelings for this character at present?

Thanks
David1

I like the character, the storyline with Ma3a determining Jade as an error seemed subtle, and now I worry, lol.

I think the direction for the characters is starting to look less technical. The piece where ma3a is standing by, as Jade brought redundancy to her User during the last few chapters, seems to hurt the dynamics of the character(s).

I know having them together in writing is more difficult, so it works. But the characters have been somewhat disconnected, then don't seem to have a word between them, other than thier programming.

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OK, well now the reasons for the digital world existing and an understanding of it's tenuous connection to the real world is starting to come forward in Jet's mind.

Also, things aren't going so well in the real world and the others have all been captured, and it seems that the military is getting involved.

The extent of Jet's user powers is starting to become apparent and he's already made a few digital faux pas.

The Datawraiths seem to be pulling out for reasons not yet clear and they seem to have other, undefined objectives that haven't been made clear yet.

Jet's secret is out - it's obvious now to those around him that he's a user ( Even though the Kernel could subsume the IC Regular ICPs, it can't subsume the conscripts amongst them )

And Mercury, and Ma3a still don't trust Jade.

Alchemist seems to be happier with the idea of killing Jet than working for him and something's not quite right with Melanie.

And even though Jet has located Melanie, he still can't get her back to the real world, because the power is out to the digitising lab and it's running on emergency power that is looking shakier by the minute.


So what's the real problem?

My chapters are getting larger containing all of the above.

So the question I wouldn't mind help with is does the story still flow well enough as they blow out in size?

All other criticisms and comments welcome too, of course.

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Thanks for the comments Aldul,

It's comments like that that keep the chapters flowing

We're just past the halfway mark at the moment (estimate based on how much story is left to tell, not on actual words/chapters).

Well, the last chapter was a little bit different from the others, so I hope no one was offended by either the content or the role the characters played.

While in real terms the characters did very little more than you'd see on public transport at times, in spiritual terms, it went a lot further and I'm hoping the spiritual side showed through in the writing. (Consider the implications of characters being able to re-experience the emotions and feelings of another).

Without putting too much of a spoiler in here, there's only so much I can say, but I will confirm that the content is a part of the story and it's not intended to be gratuitous in any way.

David1

New content. Hmmm, Sometimes I wonder if too much is happening in the digital world... Now something bad has happened to Ma3a...

Anyway, I'd be really interested in hearing from readers about this development... It's a side-story woven into the main to give Ma3a some more story time, which several readers have alluded they would like.

Of course, it may not be what everyone expected...

Any opinions?

David

ok, back to the plot. If -Ma3a was Jet's mother, and was reconstituted into the woman, possibly by using the combination of alchemist's programming and the f-con compression/extraction technology compounded, to form the technology that now belongs to Jet, giving the upper hand to him, well.. it's just a thought.